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★发文°Your smile┓英语短篇,有错误请指出

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Attention:这篇文章全英,讨厌英语的请速速点击红叉叉。
CP是米英
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It was a sun day,little America cried and ran into England's house,said with sobbed,"England,I'm very sorry...please forgive me..."
England looked at little America,asked:"Whant happened?You broken vase or other
things?"
"NO!!!"little America yelled but still cried,"You know,Thanksgiving day will coming soon,I...I wanna plant some flowers to thank you.So I sowed some seeds two months ago...But...but this morning,I wanted to water them...and...and I saw they all died...So...I don't have any present to thank you this year...."
England sighed and said:"I know,Why don't you tell me this thing before?I can help you grow flowers."
"Becauce I wanna give you a surprise...I...I wanna you smile..."little America was crying sadly better.
"All right,all right"England walked before little America and squatted down with smiled,"I have understood your mind,and now I'm smiling,so don't cry.You can smile,can't you?"
"OK,I can..."little America
smiled,but tears still stayed his eyes.
England brushed away little
America's tears with his sleeve,said,"Next time don't speak American English's
"OK",and speak anglicism's "all right",OK?"
Then,they laughed.
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After many years
"Hey...England!"America lifted a gun to England,"I think I must choose freedom!!!Because I'm strong enough and not your little brother now!!!!"
"I disagree!!!!"England rushed to America and hit his gun.Now,England lifted gun to America
"P...PREPARE TO SHOOT!"a soldier yelled who behinded America.
But England thrrew the gun,shouted:"How can I kill you?"
"Why I can't kill you...you git...no..."England knelt and cried,"YOU GIT..."
"England....I'm sorry...."
I can't speak"please forgive me"this sentence....
I wanna you smile,but I made you cried.Can you forgive me this time?
I think you can't.
But I wish you can...
When day you can forgive me....
If I had forgive day,You must promise you will smile on that day...


1楼2012-08-22 15:16回复
    前排远观……蝶子你知道我是来催什么的【捂脸


    2楼2012-08-22 15:21
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      LZ你让我情何以堪............................
      你占了多少个坑不更..........................
      还有我猫武士的文果断弃了....................
      已经删了那个帖子............................
      看看你能攒多少个大坑........................


      3楼2012-08-23 16:33
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        我看着英语蛋疼..他妈课文背死了


        4楼2012-08-23 18:22
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          差不多看得懂- -只是【差不多】


          5楼2012-08-23 18:23
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            问题嘛,真的不少
            1、sun为名词,名词前要加形容词而不是名词。
            2、英语中没有双引号,对话均为单引。
            3、will后加一般现在时,要想说即将到来用is coming
            4、我今早想浇水,前面不能加but,因为以前也想浇的。可把and去掉改为but
            5、sadly better有这用法吗?为什么前面一过这就变过进了?你这没有特定时间,不能用过进
            6、你把left拼错了。。。
            ......
            其他的我懒的列了,没看完。不过,这篇文章有点cnglish,有待提高


            6楼2012-08-24 10:00
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